I keep getting asked about Year One. Whats happening, when am I adding more, why haven’t I added more, have I given up? Am I, in fact, definately going to be adding more… generally a lot of questions asking about it. Well, I’ve not forgotten about it, I’ve just not had time to edit and re-write Part Two to a level where I’m moderately happy with it. Which is a difficult task, to be sure.

I’ve been adding bits and pieces here and there, thinking things over and trying to make more character-orientated moments. I really dislike dialogue that seems like it’s been set up in a way, and prefer to make it sound more natural than an intellectual pre-planned mess which becomes less realistic to me.

I’m working on the first few pages and part of it has the tale of the Earth-bound officers getting to know each other as they face the big challenge of toppling an infiltration. If there is an infiltration. And so far the only part of those four added pages, the only planned part has been this;

“My father was in the service too.” Morgan replied quickly as he stared into his glass. “He pushed the ideals of the Federation and Starfleet onto me as a child, made me believe all the crap the Federation wants us to believe.” Glass five was devoured. “Gave me the magical image of Starfleet being a humanitarian and peace keeping armada.”

“And you don’t believe that?”

“Well for one, he was drafted to fight in the Dominion war.” Morgan poured glass six. “Plus the fact that I’ve been assigned to secret, underhand missions and was recently, in part, involved in a cover up operation by accepting orders to abandon the independence after it was blown to hell.”

Slowly putting his glass down, de Luca lowered his voice. “What do you mean?”

“Riesman ordered me to report that it was killed by a warp core breach.” Morgan sighed. “I responded to a distress call, the ship was attacked. And it wasn’t the first time I’d lied for him.” After downing the sixth glass, Morgan pushed it away from him and slumped over the bar.

“Does Amy know?”

“Lakotda does. We discussed it in depth after the memorial service.”

Finishing his own glass, still on his first, de Luca nodded as he thought over what Morgan was saying. “Is that why you’re here, lieutenant? Redemption?”

“Partly.” Morgan replied as he picked himself off the bar. “I have other reasons.”

“Which are?” de Luca asked, “Considering I’m risking my neck alongside you, I feel I should know.”

Thinking of the information Lakotda sent him before they took on the mission to Earth, Morgan simply smiled as he picked up his jacket and hopped off his bar stool. “I’m here to complete what will hopefully be my last mission.”

“You want to bring a glorious end to your Starfleet career?”

Shaking his head, Morgan picked up the bottle and filled their glasses. “I don’t care how glorious the end is.” He clarified. “As long as it is the end.”

“You want to be dismissed. Why not just resign?”

“I tried.” Morgan took a moutfhul of his whisky, beginning to slow down. “They sent me to therapy. Said I was self destructing.”

“What does your therapist think?”

“Pretty much the same.”

“And you?”

“I think I’ve had enough of Starfleet.” Morgan nodded his head, agreeing with himself. “We both say we joined Starfleet because of our fathers, our family, but really we joined for the adventure and the opportunities available to us. Because we’d look at the stars and dream of something more in our lives.” Finishing his glass, he quickly found himself pouring another, restraining himself from ranting too much. “My time in Starfleet hasn’t been what I thought it would be. I’ve done more harm than good.”

So theres an example of whats being worked on. Hopefully I’ll have it reading a little better.

The opening of Part Two is all Earth-based and follows whats been going on there before the story of the big confusion on Sha Ka Ree is expanded upon, where the Pryor is, what really happened to Horal, whats up wth the one remaining Admiral and the big important questions like why does Morgan wear converse and why paperwork never gets filed.

There’s twenty-plus pages of revisions going on right now and there are over three hundred pages thus far of Part Two, so it’s going to take time to make them readable.

Hopefully someone out there will like it.

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